War of the Worlds

One day while I was listening to the radio I heard this mysterious message and it said”Bewarned everybody, for we are not alone on the beautiful world because we are seeing green lights entering the atmosphere. We have had one land near the coast of Britain and many more will be landing all over the world. So stay in your houses and lock the doors and hope for the best. “I quickly turned round and headed for my house, while I was heading home I saw a ship flying but bizarrely it looked like it was upside down then BBBOOOOOOMMM!

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5 Responses
  1. Mrs Hopkins says:

    Hi Dan
    What a nice load of comments you have had!
    * – a UFO visit is an interesting idea – you’ve been very imaginative with the phrase
    * – Capital letters for the sound at the end is very attention grabbing.
    W – do I have to nag you about commas for clauses EVERY time?

  2. Alex M says:

    Well done daniel . I bet you are pleased to get a comment from someone fom a nother school. Well done

  3. Elliot says:

    Hey dan this a really good piece of work, i especialy like the end, its a cliffhanger. War of the worlds is a good choice for this kind of work. 🙂 🙂 :):) 🙂 🙂 🙂
    Elliot and Oliver

  4. Lesley at Clyst St Mary School says:

    Let me know if you finish the story, it’s a real cliffhanger so far. Please pass on my congratulations to all your classmates for their super writing. You have all done really well.

    • Daniel says:

      Thank you for replying to me and i will make sure i pass on your congratulations.I dont know when i will finish it but it will probably finihed by the end of this week.

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