THE FUNFAIR

One day when i was on holiday at brean there was a massive funfair next to the water park.  As i quickly skipped through the gates i was amazed by all of the noise< the lights and how big some of the rides were.  Slowly as i walked further and further the noise kept getting louder and louder from the music playing.

Also i could hear screaming coming from the ferris wheel. Then i qued for the waltzers and as i got on the fantastic ride it started up.  As i spun round fastly the people looked upside down.

by lucy randle

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  1. Mitchell says:

    Well done Lucy I found your work really intresting to read, here are some stars and a wish.

    * I like the opener Slowly
    * good use of sentence length
    Wish: use some level 5 puntuation

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