The Australian Drive

The car journey was tedious, hot and just plain, old boring! I gazed, dreamily out of the car window: tree…bush…dirt…more bush, was this Australian car journey ever going to end? The engine of the car purred like a lazy cat on a sunny Sunday morning; confirming that this drive was tiresome. But then, out of nowhere, the car stopped suddenly. Boredom was rapidly replaced with surprise. I couldn’t see a single thing, why had the car stopped? Should I get out and investigate, should I stay inside in case it’s dangerous or should I phone for help-what should I do…?

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6 Responses
  1. Mitchell says:

    Hi, here’s two stars and a wish:
    * Good Should,should,should sentence!
    * Good Punctuation ! …; – and ?
    Wish: Use better vocab. e.g Diminutive- cacophony

  2. Mr Holder says:

    Your work has made it onto the 100wc Showcase! Well done Joseph! Mr Kenyon’s comments are spot on! 3tps ***

    • Mitchell says:

      Well done Joe you totally deserve this! An excellent piece of work.

  3. Mr Kenyon (Team 100wc) says:

    Hello Joseph – what a superb 100wc – I thoroughly enjoyed reading it!
    I think the best thing about your work is the variety of sentences you use – a simile sentences, questions, the ‘tree…bush…dirt…more bush’ sentence – brilliant! My class use some of these sentence types too.
    Mr Kenyon (Team 100wc)

    • Joseph says:

      Thank you for your comment. The sentence you liked was based on a true exprience when I went to Australia! I’m going to visit your blog and view your classes work.

  4. Amber says:

    Hi Joesph brilliant piece of work.
    Here are my two stars and a wish;
    STAR:You did a variety of punctuation.
    STAR:You did a alliteration.
    WISH:Try and do level 5 punctuation!

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