Skydiving

As swift as an arrow, as silent as an assassin, I rapidly dived out of a plane! Whoosh! I flew through the colony of clouds. AAAAAAAAH! I screamed as my polished shoes were ripped off! If only I had never of done this, if I never have had a leaflet about it, my shoes would be in the porch. “Hey I can see my house from here; the only thing was: it looked upside down! Birds pecked at me! I WAS in pain. Bang! Crash! Splash! I landed in a murky swamp! Help! I screamed as I was  gradually drowning…

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  1. Miss Kitching (Team 100WC) says:

    Hello Alex. Well done for writing your 100 Word Challenge this week. You have used some fantastic descriptive phrases, for example the similes you have used to begin with create a clear image in my head, for example ‘as swift as an arrow, as silent as an assassin’. I like the choice of words you have chosen as it creates good imagery. I am eager to know what happens next! Keep up the good work, I can’t wait to read more of your work!

  2. Adam says:

    Welldone Alex .
    star= you used a drop in clause
    star=good short snappy sentences
    wish=try and use more sentence types

  3. Lesley at Clyst St Mary School says:

    I would love to know what happened next!

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