My adventure by Govind

I had been walking for ages. My legs were cold and aching but I couldn’t stop searching. Slowly, flake by flake,  snow started falling: I thought that there was enough snow on the ground already! My feet felt numb inside my boots but I couldn’t stop searching – I couldn’t stop searching for shelter, somewhere to stay for the night. I had been walking in the forest and before I knew it, I was roaming around in snow, I tried turning back but there was no way out. It was sunset when I came to a cottage, it looked upside down…

 

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6 Responses
  1. Alex M says:

    Good use of a –
    Good use of a :
    Explain what was upside Down

    By Alex M

  2. luke says:

    wow good story I liked that you keep me thinking to the last secound and then told us what you where looking for

    to inprove insted of useing my legs where cold you chould say i chould not feel my legs hope to see more of your storys

    • Govind says:

      Hi Luke. Thank you for your comment. I am glad that you liked my writing. 🙂

  3. Zoe says:

    Wow Govind! This is great work!
    *You have varied your sentence length.
    *You have used lots of punctuation.
    W- Try to use some better openers.
    Overall this is fantastic!

    • Govind says:

      Thank you for your comment Zoe! I will try and use better openers in my next piece of writing. 🙂

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